Q. âYou say you saw Rose Atkinson...in the woods...alive?â The policeman had adopted a patronising tone, his thick eyebrows knitting together as Callie cracked her knuckles, staring the policeman straight in the eye.
âWeâre not playing Cluedo here dude. Weâre just telling you straight out what we saw.â Callie said, a slight hint of frustration in her voice.
âCallie, shut up!â Brooke glanced up from her Samsung Galaxy, stopping from her furious texting to shoot Callie a disapproving glare.
âYouâre going to want to listen to your friend young lady.â The policeman addressed Callie, tracing the outline of his gun in his bulging trouser pocket. Callie looked down at her feet meekly, not willing to have yet another run in with an armed policeman.
âWeâve told you all we know officer. Nothing more, nothing less. Weâll feedback as soon as we get more information.â Brooke said professionally, slipping her Samsung back into her pocket and straightening her blazer so it sat neatly against her collar bone.
âWhat information you have given me is useless. It couldâve been anyone out there. Youâve given me no solid evidence that miss Atkinson is alive. The case has been closed Bridget, miss Atkinson is dead.â
âBrooke.â She corrected numbly, realising that the policeman was correct. What they had thought to be case-changing new evidence was in fact...nothing. Callie scratched her head. What the hell were they doing messing around like this. The police canât use unproven evidence.
âSorry for our mistake. Thank you for your time.â Brooke stumbled over her words, still shocked at the policemanâs lack of interest in their report. The three girls trudged out onto the pavement outside the police station, Amber fixing her hair, Callie listening to Breaking Benjamin so loudly she could scarcely hear herself think and Brooke fiddling with her mobile agitatedly, tapping the screen with her pinkie finger.
âYou alright Brooke?â Callie unplugged her earphones and turned off her iPod, drowning the world in silence.
A. Nice scene here - I liked it. A few suggestions, nothing major. First, I don't think you need the ... or just use it once before 'alive.' Then I think you could put a period after tone and then say in a new sentence 'His thick eyebrows knit together and Callie stared him straight in the eye.' The cracking knuckles would fit better closer to her dialogue. You could also edit this down. 'Callie said, frustrated.' The fewer words you use, the better. Same with the next sentence 'Brooke glanced up from her furious texting and shot...' No need to give the model of her handheld - keep the action flowing. Then put a comma after 'friend.' I don't think his gun would be in his pocket - it would be visible from his belt and 'bulging' sounds a little creepy. Take out 'meekly,' you don't need it. I think you could put 'give' before 'feedback' to flow better. Period after 'professionally' and change 'slipping' to 'She slipped' then 'she straightened.' It makes it more active. I think you could take out the next ... too. Again, try to change any 'ing' verbs to 'ed' to keep them from being passive. 'Amber fixed her hair while Callie turned up her iPod...' something along those lines. It's a bit of a run on sentence too, so just break it up.
Good scene though, keep it up!
Mis-sold mobile contract?
Q. In early February I had lost my Blackberry on the bus, which I accepted and took full responsibility for. A week later I decided to take up a new contract with Tesco Mobile (O2) for a Samsung Galaxy S. During the purchase we had deliberately made a point of wanting insurance, as we didn't want to loose out on such an expensive phone if it was lost or stolen. The young man who sold us that the phone insurance was fully within the price, we couldn't believe it at first so we asked him to confirm it again for us; and he did. So I went home thinking the insurance was all sorted.
A few days ago I was in the gym changing rooms, I had put my phone in my bag while I went into the showers. When I came out my bag was tampered with, and my phone was gone. I rang the police to let them know it had been stolen straight away. I then phoned up Tesco Mobile to see about a replacement phone if I didn't receive mine back. They replied with; "Your phone isn't insured, but we can send a new sim card." I asked to speak to the manager of the store, and he told me that I can go into the store to resolve the problem with him.
I personally think the contract would be voice, if I was mis-sold it.
I also think I should be given a replacement phone, or be able to start a new contract without paying the cancellation fee for the other one.
What do you think/know will happen?
A. Sadly it would be incredibly hard to prove if a product is mis-sold, it would be your word against theirs and if you can't remember the name of the salesman it is even more unlikely they will replace the phone. If you chose to pursue this in court the legal fees would cost you more than the phone is worth and due to a lack if evidence on your part they would through the case out.
So sadly they won't replace it because of this, they will how ever give you a new sim with your contract on, but no phone :( you will have to replace it yourself.
I'm 24 and feel like I'm 50?
Q. I'm a 24 year old full-time worker and full-time college student. I'm not married nor do I have children. I find myself feeling sad or depressed for no sudden reason. I find it difficult to assimilate myself with people my age; I'm not the greatest conversation starter. My mother raised myself and my 2 younger sisters alone. Our father left us. Since a kid, my mother worked two jobs to provide for the house needs and my sisters and I. I always felt some sense of responsibility in the house. Once I turned 15 I got my driver's permit and eventually at 16 go my driver's license. Since then I have been driving and helping my mother with errands, medical and home duties. My mother doesn't know how to drive and I am the driver of the house. Anything that is needed and requires driving, I have to go out and do. I don't have a boyfriend, never had one and have never experienced the "youth life". I was often translating for my mother at almost every place because she didn't speak English and still doesn't. When money issues arose in the house, or expense, I would be the first to hear it. I would be the one my mother would pour her heart out talking about her complicated life. I fear that I will grow older, isolated from everyone else and a complete loner. I have friends, but most are married or about to get married and commence a new stage in life. I don't hold much anger towards my mother, since she has provided so much for me, but sometimes I wish I had a normal childhood. One in which I had no part in knowing my parent's life problems. Is this normal to feel? Am I mentally ill? What help is available for me? Where should I seek? I'm really confused.
A. oh so you are one of those...
.kuddos....these bitchy cranky messed up women should learn lesson from you....there are very few women like you....and women like u turn house in to paradise...and for sure the guy has to be really lucky and worthy to get a women like you......ill tell you whats going on....
children who grow up in dysfunctional families, abusive parents, or single parent....mature really fast...for their age....in terms of mental aging....while other toddlers of their ages...still depended on their parents....and for every trouble...shove their tail and whine infront of them
naturally you will feel..older than you are....since you are taking far more deeper responsibilities than these....hollow..cinemax goers.. you have been in the front line from day one....first hand experience of life...with out any parental help....for many reasons you will find that you are your own father and your own mother...and off-course u look at your sisters the same way......
and you would love..a silent moon lit night with billions visible stars.....or an amazing sunset...these are the signs of a real mature person who is more connected to the invisible intelligence called god knowingly or unknowingly and you must have found that a silent power always helps you guides you....
have you seen people who have lots of responsibility....how cold they look???....be it a minister, or a subway driver or a film director....
you must be feeling left out...or a misfit....because....what have experience your so called normal friends will experience in their 50-60's.....have you also noticed why middle age people are suddenly so nice..humble..mature....reason being..they realize that their time is closing in...and most of their "friends and family"...are either dead...or have succumb to ailments....they are all alone now....all by themselves....
the really hits then....and they thing about how stupid they were when they were young....how ruthless and selfish they were...
try it you will find you are much more comfortable with older people....its not because you are old too..but the experience of life....you experienced it way before your time....
you are a perfectly healthy 24 girl..and infact everyone man and women your age should be like you..i just so envy that why didnt i ever meet a girl like you...all i get is dumb bimbos...or some nut case......
now when you look around and see...people of your age..laughing talking about samsung galaxy note....or megan fox make up tips.....they are doing so...because they have not been made aware of the harshness of life..by their parents... unconsciousness is bliss if you will......and these 20 some people slowly discover....as they grow older.....how deep shiit they are into...and as they grow older.....the smile keeps disappearing from their face.....they think not think about how fast the car can go....but how long can it go....or hope that phone call on a weekend evening is not for them........
ill tell you what will happen to you...you will meet a sensible guy....since all those hollow hunks...find you boring....and thank god they find you boring....cuz they dont deserve you....
and with that guy..you will start blooming late....and have all the fun...that you couldnt....as a child or adolocent....if you ever see a happy go lucky women...sparkling with beauty and confidence in her 40's 50's....most probably the women had a life like yours......
now again...your so called "friends" will judge you...saying "is this the age to do such things??? cuz back in their mind....they are jealous...since they are just now discovering the harshness of life....and responsibility and see you gone past that ages ago....so now it makes them insecure...to see you secure......
but there is a sad part.....most of the chances are your children..will be spoiled..brats....provided if they understand your frequency...since you wont like to see your children go through what you've been through..and give them all the comforts....and there you go.....
so nevermind....you are on a right course keep it up. you are not alone there are many like you..its just that you people havent met each other.yet..so....never loose hope....hope is most powerful weapon mankind has ever discovered....and for a change its not lethal
respect and love...
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